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Wow, I am so sorry everyone. I am so late with this journal it's not even funny.

Here's a link back to part 1 if you haven't read it already: W-W Presents: De-Cliche Your Romance!I had a lot of fun with the Halloween contest Workshop, and I think we got a lot of good critiques in; so, huzzah! But now this train is back on its usual track.
Before we start in on this much-anticipated workshop (most highly-voted in our previous poll), I'm going to put a quick word out about our current status: tromacom, Shuriken95, and I have been running this on our own for the past few months, (with BeccaJS having had her baby :aww:) and we'd love some workshop host volunteers! So if anyone has an idea for a workshop, send it in a note, and we'll try to get you all set up to host. :D
Okay, so, that PSA outta the way...I'd like to talk to you about:
:iconbigheartplz: :iconcuteheartplz: :iconcupidplz: :iconbigloveplz:LOVE :iconbigloveplz: :iconcupidplz: :iconcuteheartplz: :iconbigheartplz:
Specifically, romantic love. It can be ooey-and-gooey, sweet and innocent, lustful, dangerous, sexy, or even traumatic. It's one of the most universal emotional experi

Okay. So. Your task for part 2! Look in the gallery and critique at least 2 pieces. You can do this even if you didn't submit anything during part 1 :) But, I'd especially like you to if you did submit to part 1, because I want everyone to get a decent amount of feedback.

Things to keep in mind...


...did you show, not tell?
...did you use the metaphor creatively?
...was the poem cohesive?

After getting critiqued, think about it, and revise your poem :). Let us know what you changed!

Story Writers!

For your fiction pieces, keep in mind the CAST...

...were the CHARACTERS interesting and believeable?
...did the ACTION (plot) unfold at a good pace? Was there foreshadowing?
...was the SETTING interesting, visible? Did it add to the mood?
...what was the THEME? How was it underscored?

The part 2 revision prompt for the story writers is this: examine the real emotions and actions that happened in your true prose piece, and see if how they could fit in a fictional story.


If you don't know where to start critiquing, some pieces submitted have none or only a few comments, so start there! :thumb338042866:
safety switchit's hard
when the boyfriend-around-the-corner
asks why you don't have a partner
to twist and twirl and
move you until you are
one eye, one eye
hard as
a crumbling paperwight apartment,
he is made out of stone
sits still for too long
and wears away
each time you meet
it's safer
like this.

Dandelion LoveYour love infects my garden.
Once a mosaic of colour,
is now a sea of yellow.
I forget to feel red,
to taste green,
to dream in silver.
Because all is yellow.
All is you.

That's it! That's all I have to say on this workshop. We have no workshop lined up for next month, but if you're in the Christmas spirit, check out ThornyEnglishRose's Christmas Story contest!

Personally, I'm in more of a, "AGHSGAHHfinals!" kinda mood, but that's just me.

If you have an idea for a workshop you'd like to see, or you'd like to host one, be sure to drop us a note!
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December 8, 2012


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